“It is the beating of his hideous heart!”
The planks lie next to the cavity below. There, he lays dead and deformed. My mind increased with headache. I finally began to realize what the future may hold because of what I had done to the old man. But still, my future would not have an involvement with that vulture eye. The gripping that eye had on me all this time, it was finally over, It was finally over! He would bring the cold chilling feeling to my body no more! But as the officers looked down at the old man, all three had that same expression of terror the old man had showd me before I killed him. They looked down and then slowly back to me, and stood frozen as if they could not believe what they saw before them. The four of us stood still and frozen with terror. Finally, they slowly took out there chains and came towards me. I fell to the ground. I groan but accept their violence upon me to bound me. They said nothing, but picked my whole body off the ground and led me out of the house away from the old man, but finally, away from that old man’s eye.
Maddie: This is the way I would have ended the story. I would want to show the officers fear and more of their involvement in the story. I would have wanted the reader to know that the killer never gets away with murder. He though he was so cunning and clever. He said His senses were so acute, but I believe he truly was crazy. I believe his emargination got the best of him. The old man should’t have died just because someone was afraid of his ugly vulture eye, that is just ridiculous. But I do admire the writers passion for excitement in the writing, especially towards the end when he can’t take the suspense and he could not hold it in any more! This Is my favorite story I have every read from Alan Poe! I LOVE IT! I would necessarily change the story, but add a bit to it if thats all right. I also love the man telling the story. He sounds like a narrator and he greatly invites the audience to feel that terror and suspense with him. So cool!
Interesting comment about the story. I can tell you are a thinker and that is really going to serve you well in your life. Your ending had its fair share of creepiness too. Good job
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